What do you think of my poem?. Rate.?

wow!! Great! 10 * !! :D this reminds me of the lyrics the singer of my favourite band called The GazettE writes. I mean.. I'm obsessed with him.. o-o (his name is Ruki xD) so almost everything reminds me of him... but if you don't already know about vk music, I suggest you look them up! I think you'd like their songs Distress and Coma, Shiroki Yuutsu, Burial applicant, Nakigahara, and Taion :D you'd have to look up the lyrics while you listen to the songs, or watch a PV with english subtitles, because the music is in Japanese, but they're beautiful <3 and so is your poem! good job :)